Nice opening 'chapter', I am intrigued. I did get a little bit confused with all the different human characters, but I'm sure things will be made clearer in the following installments. There were some typos but hey, nobody's perfect. I do see some shades of the 'Only Human' episode where humans tried to control Transformers =). Not bad though, you took it and adapted it to your concept.. Looking forward to seeing more familiar Autobots and Decepticons in the next installment.