Name: Sirius (Signed) · Date: 11/11/03 - 10:37 am · For Chapter: Batteries Not Included

Interesting...I'd like to see a follow up story.

Name: peppermintwind (Signed) · Date: 24/06/03 - 09:13 am · For Chapter: Batteries Not Included

Pretty darn good for a shameless self-insert. Hey, nobody's immune. I liked the scene right after she shot TC (poor TC...). I think I'd feel sick if I'd thought I'd killed someone too, and you pulled it off really well.

Name: kidu (Signed) · Date: 06/08/02 - 04:46 am · For Chapter: Batteries Not Included

He-e-ey, it's a Saturn-bot! I wanted to see one of those, and now I don't have to do it myself, because you did. And very, very nicely described. I love the amount of sensory detail, both human and otherworldly, that you impart as a natural part of the narrative. I did get snagged by the quote thing, as Reu mentioned, but ...oh well. Well done, overall. Only one question: Did NiCad decide to stay a TF even though there was a chance she could go back to being human, or did Ratchet later revise his estimation to say she simply couldn't go back?

Name: Reu (Signed) · Date: 11/07/02 - 02:56 pm · For Chapter: Batteries Not Included

Nicely done, but it would be an easier read it you could clearly mark where people were talking or thinking. There seems to be some quotation marks, but at other times there aren't any. My only gripe. :) Other than that, I love the story and the idea behind it. Well witten.